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Haunted House Survivors

June 16th, 2010, 1:28 pm

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This comic was given a review by BadX over on We Review Comics! It's a re-review, considering the first incarnation of this comic was reviewed there once before.

We got a BAD score.

Some of the things wrong:
*No central plot.
*Bad attempts at humor.
*Bad/unreadable text bubbles.
*NPC character personality/attitude inconsistencies.
*GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION MISTAKES. (THIS IS A BIG ONE)
*Bland characters.
*Etc.

A big mistake is that, apparently, there's too much emphasis on fighting and little-to-no emphasis on story-building. Too many people trying to show off their "skillz" in fighting because they can't tell a story at all.

So here's a new challenge: for all authors currently in fights, end those fights (as reasonably as you can without godmodding, please) and spend your next TEN (10) comics building on the storyline and/or your character's personality.

What is the storyline, you say?


Background: Nightmare owns the haunted house. Sonic and Tails stopped at the house (in the original comic) to stay the night and then continue on their way, but they were possessed. Nightmare offered an ultimatum: Sonic and Tails "sells" the house to as many people as they can, and when Nightmare is satisfied with the amount of potential souls in his possession, Sonic and Tails can go free.

Current Story: Sonic and Tails are still out "selling" the house to people. The people that have been duped are trapped in the house until they are killed off by Nightmare's minions OR until Nightmare is defeated utterly.
Nightmare has also got quite a few spells in place that are preventing some of the inhabitants from finding the others. Of course, with more than one villain in the house, the power of the spells is greatly weakened, so some of the inhabitants have grouped together. So the first purpose is to find the other inhabitants, and break the spells keeping everyone separated.


*DO NOT confront Nightmare.
*DO NOT use Sonic or Tails.
*DO NOT change Tikal's personality. She is a pure spirit, she would not use curses or get angry for no reason. Her spirit also cannot leave the house.
*DO NOT use Ultimate's characters in your story development, unless it's a flashback, because he's in the middle of a battle that won't end until he returns.

I'm quite sure there are several authors right now who are ready to leave the comic because it's becoming just as bad as the first incarnation. I'm getting to that point myself, but I'm not quite ready to give up yet.

If anyone has any other story quirks/suggestions to make, please make them in a comment on this news post.

Thank you.

-SF3

Comments:

TheDarkman1990, June 16th, 2010, 1:38 pm

SF3

Since Ult said he is lazy to send me a re-invite. I am asking you if you can do so. I really wanna help you guise.

And well the only I use Nightmare is, when he is possessing my chara with a spell.

So yeah

Ultimate the Hedgehog, June 16th, 2010, 1:53 pm

well sp3 i'd say i'm proud that you wont give up
i actually have soem good story ideas but can't use them cuz... well you know
so if anyone needs tips just pm me

TheDarkman1990, June 16th, 2010, 2:35 pm

@ Ult I go with my possessed story. Like the last time :D

EDIT: BTW. I hope some people have readed this.

SF3P0X1, June 17th, 2010, 12:26 pm

I wonder if my news posts are getting ignored because they're so long <.<

Harrow, June 17th, 2010, 9:56 pm

@Story: Makes you wonder, "Kay. So what am I supposed to do?"
Needs a purpose. Some destination to get to. Otherwise the story doesn't do anything.
All anyone can really do is fight with the blobby things, poke at the big shadowy hedgehog guy(Which often turns into a miniature event that does not affect the storyline whatsoever.), and go "lolhei" to the other trapped members.
The other authors won't be able to do any story related comics unless Ultimate makes some event inviting them in.
The authors who attempt to make some storyline related thing end up making something that makes no sense and/or interferes with Ultimate's plans (???), because they have no idea what is going on. If not, then the only thing their comic affects is either their own character, or someone else's character(s).

Of course, that's just an opinion from a lazy bum.

SF3P0X1, June 17th, 2010, 10:49 pm

Good point. I'll edit it and see about adding a purpose.

Plazmaz, June 18th, 2010, 12:00 pm

TIME FOR (another) TURNAROUND!

Salamar, June 18th, 2010, 7:16 pm

When I find the time to stop feeling sick, and make an intro, I'll do my best with these guidelines.

Spear the Hedgehog, June 22nd, 2010, 1:38 am

I've been thinking of a way to get Ultimate out of the plothole, introduce myself into the comic, and create a plot start for Ultimate and anyone who wants to follow it.

GreyouTT, July 2nd, 2010, 11:08 am

I'm not giving up either. I WILL FINISH THOSE SPRITES!

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